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Post by CRC on Feb 23, 2016 6:38:27 GMT -7
 First Name: Kama Last Name: no hanta Current Occupation: Adventurer Groups involved in Ilsurian marksmen Description: Eyes: Sky Blue Hair: Silver Height: 5’1” Weight: 165 Race: Human Gender: Female Age: 17 Languages Known: Common, BackGround: All she ever knew was archery as far as she could remember it was her way of life. Looking back, she wonders how different her life could have been if her parents did not die she. Living in the woods on here on her own. living off the plants and animals to survive she loves living in the forest. One day she hads to Rook to see if she could meet other people like here that would want to help her protect her forest. |
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Post by bioa10 on Feb 28, 2016 12:18:07 GMT -7
A few things: - Problems with your backstory, there is no place called Golarion. There is no Varisia Army or Varisia War. Please use the lore of Dragons' Gate.
- You didn't fill in your will, it should be 0.
- You can't have Reckless and Reactionary as they are both combat traits.
- You can't have two ranks in acrobatics because your skill ranks can never be higher than your hit dice.
- Your skills should be 8, 6+int mod, you wrote down 6.
- You forgot to mark Spellcraft as a class skill.
Please fix these things and re-submit.
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Post by CRC on Feb 28, 2016 18:34:19 GMT -7
ok Bioa10 its fixed check it out and tell me how it is
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Post by bioa10 on Mar 2, 2016 23:34:08 GMT -7
Regional Traits aren't allowed because we use a custom world and don't have a place called Qadira, which is a requirement for the Watching Taldor (On Guard) trait. Your initiative should be 4 (Or 3 after you replace On Guard).
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Post by CRC on Mar 3, 2016 4:44:32 GMT -7
ok bioa its fixed i took a racial trait
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Post by bioa10 on Mar 5, 2016 13:29:36 GMT -7
Looks good to me.
Approved.
Please make a thread in the "Characters" sub-forum.
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